Thread:Joev14/@comment-25181280-20140523015823

To expand my thoughts a little, I really like how this is a narrative-based story. The characters are developing quite nicely with interactions and friendships. A lot of emotion is captured with how descriptive you write each sequence - it's almost as if I am there watching over the shoulder of Destiny! This also helps me visualize mental images of what is being portrayed in your writings.

I'm looking forward to the reading rest of the story (when I have a decent amount of free time available). I am very busy with other things in life - multiple jobs, moving, planning vacation - just a lot going on. I don't get on here everyday, so it may take me a while to get through reading your story.

I would encourage asking what other active users think about your story, just toget a second opinion.

Keep writing! Cheers! 